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Jun 11, 2005 14:03:38 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 11, 2005 14:03:38 GMT -6
I want to run away from the fighting the crying the pain But I can't I just lock myself in my room and turn my music up real loud I think it's best for me to run but I don't know Running is not the answer But what is? I think and think I get nothing Nothing at all Nothing but a sweet kiss from the guy of yesterday Nothing but a smile on his face Nothing but being in his arms forever Knowing I can't be with him Wanting to not feel this way Needing to die Knowing I want to cry But mysteriously I don't I hold it all inside Just like all my secrets I would be open but I'm afraid of being hurt again So I stay closed
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Jun 11, 2005 19:11:18 GMT -6
Post by Xanthic Flower on Jun 11, 2005 19:11:18 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]That's how I feel right now. Great job with the last few lines.[/glow]
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Jun 11, 2005 19:38:00 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 11, 2005 19:38:00 GMT -6
Thanks I appreciate it.
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BlueMoon
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Jun 12, 2005 19:36:25 GMT -6
Post by BlueMoon on Jun 12, 2005 19:36:25 GMT -6
That's really emotional. It shows mixed feelings in my opinion, because you know you should do something, but you can't because it's too painful. Good job.
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Jun 14, 2005 0:25:04 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Jun 14, 2005 0:25:04 GMT -6
Its great! I love it. Keep writing you have a real talent for it.
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Jun 14, 2005 19:16:52 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Jun 14, 2005 19:16:52 GMT -6
wonderful, i love this poem, amazing, im in awe, thats a terrific poem, no suggestions at all
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Jun 25, 2005 9:34:56 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 25, 2005 9:34:56 GMT -6
wow...well i really appreciate it. I think I'm getting better at writing about pain. I get inspired by the tragedy of my life. But I also get inspired by the happiness I feel. I think tragedy is more powerful and more interesting then happiness.
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Jul 13, 2005 13:16:56 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on Jul 13, 2005 13:16:56 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i think that many people can relate to this poem. i especially liked how you ended it. using the word "closed" gives it such a loud finality.[/glow]
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