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Post by puchik0 on Apr 17, 2005 22:43:11 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]UNWANTED
DARKNESS LET ME IN DEMONS TAKE ME OPEN UP THE DOOR TO THE UNWANTED WORLD. IS THERE A DIFFERENCE, THIS WORLD & THE NEXT? SURELY I’LL FIND UNDERSTANDING THERE DARK WAS MY SOUL UNTOLD WAS THE PAIN ALL I EVER WANTED WAS TO BE FREE WITHOUT SHAME AGONY WITHIN MY HEART A SHADOW HAUNTING ME GROWING STRONGER FEEDING FROM MY AGONY
WATCH THE DARKNESS GROW AS IT CONSUMES THE WORLD SOUL BY SOUL AS WE GROW OLD IT WILL BECOME STRONG
. . . I WILL KEEP KNOCKING TILL IT LETS ME IN. . .[/glow]
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Post by Sharon on Apr 18, 2005 5:18:03 GMT -6
very nice! i loved how you chose to use the red glowiness, (I hadn't even realized one could do that!) lol ;D thank you so much for sharing!
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Post by NotSoPerfect on Apr 18, 2005 8:57:43 GMT -6
i don't know, it didn't flow as well as it could have for me. it was not at all bad, and it was sort of an ironic contrast that you chose, but i would draft it a few more times. your font certainly did accentuate your theme.
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Post by allmeheart on Apr 18, 2005 15:54:12 GMT -6
it was good, the font affect(sp?) was very nice, I liked the poem, but I would have explained a little more, maybe added some memories of some sort to help ppl get the feeling quicker
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BlueMoon
A Dedicated Distraction
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Post by BlueMoon on Jun 17, 2005 13:34:54 GMT -6
This was good. The font added an effect as others said. Maybe add detail as why you want the darkness to consume you.
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Post by Only Me on Jun 17, 2005 22:48:47 GMT -6
I didnt like the font... naw I'm just kidding thought I would contrast what everyone else said... it worked well... it didnt really flow well but i think that adds to the effect the words are supposed to have as you read them...
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 1, 2005 11:42:38 GMT -6
It was good. I liked it
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elmarie
Contently A Distraction
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Post by elmarie on Oct 9, 2005 16:01:49 GMT -6
. . . I WILL KEEP KNOCKING TILL IT LETS ME IN. . .[/glow] [/quote]
thats the part i especially liked.. it gave the poem a sense of finality i feel. love the font. el marie
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Post by Laura on Dec 20, 2005 20:34:06 GMT -6
" IS THERE A DIFFERENCE, THIS WORLD & THE NEXT? SURELY I’LL FIND UNDERSTANDING THERE DARK WAS MY SOUL UNTOLD WAS THE PAIN" --I really adored this part. The caps kind of threw me off but it was nice. I like this as well: " WATCH THE DARKNESS GROW AS IT CONSUMES THE WORLD SOUL BY SOUL AS WE GROW OLD" --great job
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