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Post by XoXo_Branden_XoXo on May 14, 2005 21:54:12 GMT -6
Dont worry, this was a loong time ago when i wrote this...so no worries.
I just cant take it.
I just cant fake it.
I Dont like it,
And just cant fight it.
F*ck myself.
F*ck my Feelings.
They just wanna stay,
And wont go away.
Slit my throat,
Burn me to hell.
Do what you will,
Cause this is making me ill.
Block it off,
Shut it away,
Thats all i can do,
Until it comes, that day...
When i die.
That'll be the day.
When things are better.
Cause ill be away...
For Good
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Post by Sharon on May 20, 2005 1:12:09 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]wow, i think this is the darkest piece i've seen you write. i'm glad your feeling better now. That first stanza... when i was reading it, i was thinking that it sounds like a song i've heard before but i can't quite put finger on it. well thanks for sharing Branden[/glow]
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Post by XoXo_Branden_XoXo on May 21, 2005 5:23:27 GMT -6
Its not from a song. I wrote this piece last year. And actaully me and my band are takin this piece and editing it a little and singin it as one of our songs.
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Post by Sharon on May 21, 2005 17:25:27 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]oh wow! i didn't know you were in a band, that's really cool. so are you a band that actually plays instruments or are you a music group?[/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on May 23, 2005 21:38:13 GMT -6
loved it, ive been able to relate to everything uve written so far, really good job
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Aug 16, 2005 7:28:45 GMT -6
wow... that was very good, i loved it
good job
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 16, 2005 9:01:19 GMT -6
Wow, that was rather dark, but it was a wonderful piece. Besides, the darker a piece is, the better it feels to let it out, right? It's like Jean Cocteau once said:
"Poets are jails. Works are the convicts who escape"
The darker the convict, the more trouble he will cause within the system and once he's out, the world is gifted with a dark and harsh sort of beauty, while the jail itself is at peace for at least a little while. You know what I mean?
Anywho.....great poem.
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Post by Only Me on Sept 7, 2005 22:12:55 GMT -6
emotionally charged, I am glad you are over that bumpy patch in the road of life...
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Post by xxdarkxangelxx on Dec 4, 2005 12:46:36 GMT -6
I can really relate to this. I used to be kinda suicidal, but not so much anymore.
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Post by Laura on Dec 20, 2005 20:31:52 GMT -6
It was okay. The first stanza didn't have as much impact and effect as it would if there were rhyme instead of repetition especially since the rest of the poem rhymed.
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