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Post by haley13xoxo on Jul 25, 2005 17:29:51 GMT -6
ressurection by haley
im dead from all the waiting im dead from all the tears that havnt fallen and all the blood thats taken its place im dead from all the razor cuts that stretch across my arms im dead from being emotionally drained im dead from noone knowing my pain im dead from not really being there at all im dead from such a hard fall
slowly a tear falls down my cheeck and im alive again
*******inspired by this lyric "when everything feels like the movies you would bleed just to know your alive" -goo goo dolls
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Post by Absinthe on Jul 25, 2005 18:40:35 GMT -6
hmmm.....It wasn't bad. Though, I do have few quibbles:
cheeck should be cheek noone should be no one
Anyway, its not bad, I think you've got potential.
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Post by Sharon on Jul 25, 2005 19:15:37 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i love the Goo Goo Dolls and I love the song "Iris" i can definitely see how those lines inspired this piece. i am not a big fan of the repition of "I'm dead" but hey, everyone has their own preferences. my only suggestion is to run this by spell check.[/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:46:14 GMT -6
wow, thats creepy, not long ago i had a discussion about that song("Iris") it used to be a theme song of mine, i liked this poem though i saw a few errors that did irritate me a bit
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Post by Only Me on Sept 7, 2005 22:31:11 GMT -6
im should be I'm or I am... and havnt should be haven't or have not... but other than that i really like it...
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