But Am I

[Sharon]

But I don't think I ever made it back
Can't seem to quite relax
Everything should be good
They are good
But am I?

But things really were that bad
It's ok we didn't last
Everything should be fine
Everything is fine
But am I?

[Absinthe]

Mar 9, 2022 8:37:50 GMT -6 Sharon said:

Everything should be fine
Everything is fine
But am I?

I like the ending here. It resonates. The "But" to start each stanza is a little jarring, but it feels intentional. Nice job, Sharon.

[Sharon]

Absinthe, It's interesting that you mentioned that using 'but' is a little jarring because I've made it a point to try and deliberately remove "but" from my vocabulary. It's something that was instilled in me by a mentor who explained that it's important to aim to sound more intelligent and use other phrases in place of 'but' e.g. however, although then there's "and" which is the better alternative to get the person you're speaking to on your side.

Example:

John: I'm not doing that, it's a waste of time

Paul: But it's your job, what do you need to get it finished?

Instead...

John: I'm not doing that, it's a waste of time.

Paul: Yes it's time consuming and a big ask, how can I help you get it done?

But I digress.. I did intentionally use the word "But" here because in my opinion it quickly communicates the emotion of feeling not in control and being on the defense and feeling pressure to almost explain one's self. a