Bound for the Bog

[Cullen]

I'm trying to break away from my compulsive rhyming that is often forced...i wrote this poem during a class i wasn't supposed to be writing poems during, so it sounds kind of broken as i had to pretend to be paying attention and often lost my train of thought...i like how it turned out though...

give me your souls...i mean opinions


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Another day, another person
who will i be next
Into the snow, i must
Escape from my prison

Now that I am out
I can begin to be honest
I find reality painful
Chronicled as a generation in turmoil
And Now Bound for the Bog
It doesn't cut close enough to heart
As tears for kin and friends come -
As Advertised
I'll look like a stranger someday,
Yet until that day has come
I, an outcast of society,
Watch hearts burn
For an unknown reality
An oh so reassuring Illusion

There's a truth in your lies
A love in your hate
Perhaps, Perhaps, nothing
Never mind my thoughts
A different world
Of the minds construction
Sparks fly, wind blows.

NATURE ALLOWS CONFORMITY,
Birds of a feather
now Dead to me.
and Flocking together
is a thing of the past
Now Bound for the bog
I go

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[Sharon]

I'll look like a stranger someday,
Yet until that day has come
I, an outcast of society
Watch hearts burn

There part stuck out for me - it got me thinking a bit, thank you!

Many people out there will frown and even get to the point of stressing out when they see other individuals dressed a certain way or just judge in some way or other as if they knew the person. People who look different tends to intimidate others (though at times this just might be their intention) making them somewhat an outcast of society.

[Cullen]

You're welcome?

And if that was a compliment thanks....im not really sure if it was or not...

[NotSoPerfect]

backslash said:

There's a truth in your lies
A love in your hate

I really liked that line. It's one of those contradictions that makes perfect sense. Well, they both are I suppose. I could completely identify with those two lines.

I could kind of tell that you kept stopping/starting, because some of the lines totally had it, but others not so much. It was broken up pretty uniquely. Was there a method to that?

[Cullen]

Those are my two favorite lines aswell

and the method behind breaking it up was me pressing down a random number of times and pressing enter (i know it sounds stupid but yeah i did it)

[Absinthe]

"There's a truth in your lies
A love in your hate"

....Love the contradicting nature of these two lines....very interesting.


Also, I am adoring that last stanza, especially the opening line "Nature allows conformity" - well spotted, indeed. Good concept here and an interesting arrangement.

I'm not quite sure how I feel about the piece as a whole. I suppose I'm fairly neutral on it. I did love those two sections though.