Will You Go Away Wednesday

[thecrazybeautiful]

This was for a contest about days of the week... Well I very much dislike wednesdays. Wednesday uses people as pawns to make me mad...

Will You Go Away Wednesday

why should you get to glow so golden
knowing I shine on a lower level
you just pushed me further down

oh wednesday
I think your ride is calling

the magic rode away so close to happy
and you should have jumped
should have caught the trip home
maybe somewhere up north this time

you seem to like hanging around me
(slowly picking apart enjoyable memories)
rather then helping some other girl
who is wanting to know more about someone

maybe a boy
maybe

why did you allow him to stir up my name
and toss it in my face all jumbled
the wrong way cause you were wrong all around
a team not worth the game you play

oh wednesday
wipe your lies off of my face

he was some kind of black hole
full of empty actions and hollow words
using an invisible charm to ensure stability
a one time offer selling
maybe I jumped up too fast
and you pulled me in too far
you pushed me past the edge
while making a home on my doorstep

ringing the bell every week
I hope it haunts your ears when you leave

oh wednesday
I want you out of my life

[Absinthe]

"ringing the bell every week
I hope it haunts your ears when you leave"


........I like this. Good job.

[Laura]

The idea is wonderful and the beginning:

"why should you get to glow so golden
knowing I shine on a lower level
you just pushed me further down

oh wednesday
I think your ride is calling

the magic rode away so close to happy
and you should have jumped
should have caught the trip home
maybe somewhere up north this time"

--was exceptionally strong, but then it kind of fell a little lower because it kind of changed into a poem about a guy. It's still a well-written poem, but I would have liked it all to be about Wednesday.