xsavemex
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by xsavemex on Apr 29, 2006 18:08:40 GMT -6
I am so sick of everyone. Every word they say, I only hear blah, blah, blah. I need more motivation... And he's my inspiration. I only wish he knew.
You say it like it's a bad thing, And that is the way I am. Oh, no hard feelings, but I am getting ticked. You guys need to open your eyes.
Are you going to believe In every word He says? He is full of it, Snap out of it! I am your daughter, Nothing else should matter anyway.
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Post by Laura on Apr 30, 2006 18:08:06 GMT -6
I thought this was kind of confusing ... but I think with work it could be interesting. It just needs more development/focus.
"You guys need to open your eyes"
--"guys" is unnecessary and breaks the feeling. Good job!
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 1, 2006 16:35:51 GMT -6
"And he's my inspiration. I only wish he knew"
I know that feeling. I'm always writing about some guy or another. There was one guy and I had alot of poems on the general idea of him, or how I felt about him. It felt weird though, writing about him, and not having him know. I felt so secretive...
"You say it like it's a bad thing,"
I've always liked being able to say that to people...
Nice job!
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Post by sharonslover on May 3, 2006 8:19:43 GMT -6
It could really enjoy it i think its missing something
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