a man who had lost his dogma

[grifter]

a man who had lost his dogma
posting posters in the door
of a diner

cringed from his
photocopied crucifix

as a more dressed man
yelled something about
saying
no pickles

then i saw
on the
floor
what wasn’t
there

i said sir
i think i’ve found
what you're
looking for

but once in hand
i was relieved

it was just
the end of
a
poem

[Laura]

The idea is fresh and original and the ending was superb but this stanza:

"as a more dressed man
yelled something about
saying
no pickles"

--I don't understand. I really liked the ending though

[grifter]

a more dressed man- he is suppose to be a person, who adheres strictly to religious dogma, he yells at a waitress, "I SAID NO PICKLES", and that's what makes the guy jump, while he's putting up his posters, people who get upset, over something small, like their order being screwed up, remind me of dogmatic people, i am kind of proud of this one, as always thank you for your kind words

[thecrazybeautiful]

I agree, nice ending