grifter
A Devoted Distraction
Posts: 135
|
To~
Apr 6, 2006 22:03:54 GMT -6
Post by grifter on Apr 6, 2006 22:03:54 GMT -6
To~
her supple
after bubbles
blister below heaven
with a demon’s freedom
in bright
tangible tangles
tinged brittle green
between clean
candle pinks
and my
heated heart
is interdigital
in our indigo
bursting below
her blown violets
and my violent blues
|
|
|
|
To~
Apr 7, 2006 14:29:21 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Apr 7, 2006 14:29:21 GMT -6
" blister below heaven" --I like how this is worded. " tinged brittle green" --lovely description. It's not my favourite poem by you but it's still nice. Nothing but nice I guess  |
|
grifter
A Devoted Distraction
Posts: 135
|
To~
Apr 12, 2006 10:52:10 GMT -6
Post by grifter on Apr 12, 2006 10:52:10 GMT -6
she should have been a candle
she should have been a candle
yellow and pink
her supple after bubbles
blistering below heaven
in tangible tangles
tinged brittle green
an indigo machine
she has a demon's feedom
|
|
stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
Posts: 229
|
To~
Apr 12, 2006 12:20:06 GMT -6
Post by stupidxgirl on Apr 12, 2006 12:20:06 GMT -6
I love how you write, it's always so different and exciting to read Well done on this one like always. Not my favorite I must say, but it's still good. |
|
|
|
To~
Apr 12, 2006 12:22:41 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Apr 12, 2006 12:22:41 GMT -6
"tinged brittle green" "candle pinks" "in our indigo bursting below her blown violets and my violent blues" Like the colors |
|
|
|
To~
Jul 4, 2006 23:29:46 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Jul 4, 2006 23:29:46 GMT -6
I love it. my favorite line is :"in bright
tangible tangles
tinged brittle green " It really paints an avid picture.
|
|
