Alliteration Experiment

[thecrazybeautiful]

I woke up yesterday morning and the first part of this just spilled out, so I figured I'd try and make something of it.


Secrets spill frequently from
monday morning coffee cravers
driving delusion to the
grapevine gates.

Luck lasts only one
measly minute for forgotten
loves lost through the
swirling spoons of overly
elegant energy.

It's indigo short skirts
brightened by fiery-fitting
tangible t-shirts.
They throw around acknowledging
smiles showing false favors,
including interest, trying to
begin breaking hope harvested
in instances where wondering
exceeds enough.

And always these thorough
drinkers divulge, positioning poetry
through their lazy laptops.
Change challenges ritual routines
into insisting silly suggestions
of only remaining right
there to live lonely.

Long lines mean much
to them, and also
sweet sugar gathering greatly
in inviting coffee cups.

[stupidxgirl]

I really loved this, it has amazing images and the wording was strong. Awesome job I can't really pick my favorite part, I loved it all.

[grifter]

this has a nice sound, like a waterslide,

[Laura]

I really liked these two parts best:

"swirling spoons of overly
elegant energy."

--I loved how this flowed.

"in instances where wondering
exceeds enough"

--I'm unsure of how to describe how this had an effect on me but I really liked it. Good job with your experiment, heh