thunderstorm in the distance

[grifter]

thunderstorm in the distance

all of forward under neater
cleaner than tree canopies upturned
for another waiting signal
creases against creases
pieces of a planned palm burn
an obscure defer preferred

leaning into meaning
seeming deeply healing
breathing love above the feeling
leaving leaves against the ceiling
yearning for the turning
and the swirling of the curling
in the hurry and the wait

[Laura]

I liked how this easily slipped off the tongue ... I was particularly fond of these moments:

"cleaner than tree canopies upturned
for another waiting signal
creases against creases
pieces of a planned palm burn"

--firstly, I haven't heard canopy/ies in so long and it was just a pleasant surprise and palm burn was a great visual.

"breathing love above the feeling
leaving leaves against the ceiling"

--I like effective repetition ... your "leaving leaves" is great!

[Only Me]

I really like how you write, everything seems so organized and flows so well.

[thecrazybeautiful]

"breathing love above the feeling
leaving leaves against the ceiling"

Wow, I really like that. There's such individuality behind your words, it's really nice.