Maiden in Distress

[ylime]

"Maiden in Distress"

It is dark and I am dreaming
Of fairy tales I used to read
With knights who were always scheming
An escape on their noble steed

I awake inside your castle
Enclosed in cold and hard stone walls
Where I have become a vassal
To a ceaseless and dark nightfall

When you storm into my dungeon
I am scared and silently scream
You’ve become a raging dragon
Your nostrils breathing vicious steam

I lay wanting to be stronger
With bright armor so it won’t hurt
When you start to yell the fire
That pierces my worn threadbare shirt

[Laura]

I thought the ending seemed a bit forced but I enjoyed this. I liked the rhyme for the most part, this stanza:

"When you storm into my dungeon
I am scared and silently scream
You’ve become a raging dragon
Your nostrils breathing vicious steam"

--in particular stood out for me. I love the description and comparison you've used. Good job and I hope to read more from you