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Blast
Mar 3, 2006 18:38:47 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Mar 3, 2006 18:38:47 GMT -6
*OneWord is back up and running.....'nuff said. Blast me through to oblivion, mask my mind from fear Hold me close in warm embrace and gun down the demons there Chase them from my vision Blast them back to Hell Don't stop holding me. . . . *Yeah, didn't get to finish in the 60 seconds and I'm contemplating adding more and totally tearing it apart to edit, but at the same time, I like the rugged-ness of this and that its not refined in any way and it just.....is
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stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
Posts: 229
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Blast
Mar 4, 2006 1:02:04 GMT -6
Post by stupidxgirl on Mar 4, 2006 1:02:04 GMT -6
It's interesting really, that raw-ness and unfinished flow kinda adds something I think. The message is clearly there and isn't cheapend by too many words. But, I would like to see it with more if you do decide to edit it. It could reall be an amazing piece.
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Blast
Mar 4, 2006 7:35:17 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Mar 4, 2006 7:35:17 GMT -6
Ooh I like it. I know oneword is back and I did blast too! I thought "I didn't post that here" haha! It kind of sounds cut off but that might make it more interesting ... I'm unsure. If you continue it, it may not advantage it so it's really hard to say. I guess you can always make it longer and see what you like best.
So glad oneword is back, eh?
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Blast
Mar 12, 2006 20:51:08 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Mar 12, 2006 20:51:08 GMT -6
oh very glad.....oneword is a savior some days.
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Blast
Jul 4, 2006 22:59:39 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Jul 4, 2006 22:59:39 GMT -6
i think it is fine the way it is... maybe add a little more to it but i don't think you should break it down and edit. it works.
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Blast
Jul 11, 2006 7:02:34 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Jul 11, 2006 7:02:34 GMT -6
I think this would be nice as it is, or if you made it longer. I like the cut off of the last line, but more to it would be nice as well. It's one of those things that can go either way.
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