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Jul 27, 2008 21:33:45 GMT -6
Post by The Brutal Immortal on Jul 27, 2008 21:33:45 GMT -6
Your heart is split with dark and light, Unsure of which direction to fight, Follow your "friends", let Satan have his way, Or take the light, let The Father stay...
The choice is yours, to Hell or Grace, But you must walk at your own pace, Let your heart shine with His name, Or let Darkness take you, play Satan's game...
You wonder about the thoughts in your mind, Who will you call "Your Kind", Those with hearts black as sin, Or those with no reason t fear satan again...?
Accept the light, but dont turn away "frends," Bring Jesus to the school once again, Just 3 men can raise the town, But just one less can break it down...
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Aug 1, 2008 16:31:20 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Aug 1, 2008 16:31:20 GMT -6
I really like the concept of this poem but I think the last stanza didn't make all that much sense, it doesn't flow well with the rest of the poem, maybe if you get rid of the last stanza it will make more sense. That's just my opinion. Other than that I liked it, good job. 6/10.
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Aug 3, 2008 16:54:34 GMT -6
Post by The Brutal Immortal on Aug 3, 2008 16:54:34 GMT -6
it means take in jesus, bring him back to the schools which have turned away from him, and by 3 men it means the father, the son, and one folower of the way, but by 2 men it means satan and a satanist... does that help clarify some?
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Aug 3, 2008 19:22:59 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Aug 3, 2008 19:22:59 GMT -6
Yes, thank you. That makes more sense.
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