Post by Laura on Dec 20, 2005 20:17:48 GMT -6
The first one I wrote in April and just now I reversed it (as best to my ability) ... it's not my best poem but I thought it was fun to flip it and want to know some opinions.
-original-
i cried last night to the sound of distant drums
or was it thunder that hibernated inside my mind
and found its way to me and cause itself to spread . . .
i found myself a lightning seed
tucked it underneath the skin
that ripples on the top of your crooked mouth
the one that smiles i never had one
and i caved into my own self delusion
wrapped myself in plastercine until i embedded myself
into the bedroom floor and i deserved it
i deserved to be punished
[ for i let you down ]
i learned to listen, i learned to hear
the spooky whispers bouncing in your ear - it's clear
i'm only a ghost to you now
and if i ask the question, if i ask my saliva runs dry
and my tears swell up like fire
the flesh drips off my bone like the solitude has crept to me
so quickly and easily i will fall apart
i cried last night, clutching myself - embracing myself
i knew i was alone before this, i knew i was alone
but i've never felt like this before and maybe i'm liquid
that was melted from the sun
maybe i'm a mistake that escaped the pattern
that etched itself into his skin and tattooed
he will never grant forgiveness.
-reversed-
he will never grant forgiveness
a tattoo etched into his skin
I was the mistake that escaped the pattern
the sun got too hot, it started to melt
I became liquid and never before have I felt this
even though I always knew I was alone
and I cried last night, clutching myself - embracing myself
I fall apart so quickly and easily
the flesh drips off my bone like solitude
my tears swell up like a fire
and my saliva runs dry
I'm only a ghost to him now
the whispers bounching in his ear - it's clear
I only wish I learned to listen
[ I let you down ]
I deserve to be punished
and I'm grounded, on to the bedroom floor
and I deserve to be embedded there
for I've caved into my own self delusion
I never had a smile like his
the ones that ripple on the top of a crooked mouth
I used to tuck myself underneath the skin
it's where I found his lightning seed
and somehow my body's been spread
where thunder hibernated inside my head
and I cried last night to the sound of distant drums
wishing he'd come back to me.
-original-
i cried last night to the sound of distant drums
or was it thunder that hibernated inside my mind
and found its way to me and cause itself to spread . . .
i found myself a lightning seed
tucked it underneath the skin
that ripples on the top of your crooked mouth
the one that smiles i never had one
and i caved into my own self delusion
wrapped myself in plastercine until i embedded myself
into the bedroom floor and i deserved it
i deserved to be punished
[ for i let you down ]
i learned to listen, i learned to hear
the spooky whispers bouncing in your ear - it's clear
i'm only a ghost to you now
and if i ask the question, if i ask my saliva runs dry
and my tears swell up like fire
the flesh drips off my bone like the solitude has crept to me
so quickly and easily i will fall apart
i cried last night, clutching myself - embracing myself
i knew i was alone before this, i knew i was alone
but i've never felt like this before and maybe i'm liquid
that was melted from the sun
maybe i'm a mistake that escaped the pattern
that etched itself into his skin and tattooed
he will never grant forgiveness.
-reversed-
he will never grant forgiveness
a tattoo etched into his skin
I was the mistake that escaped the pattern
the sun got too hot, it started to melt
I became liquid and never before have I felt this
even though I always knew I was alone
and I cried last night, clutching myself - embracing myself
I fall apart so quickly and easily
the flesh drips off my bone like solitude
my tears swell up like a fire
and my saliva runs dry
I'm only a ghost to him now
the whispers bounching in his ear - it's clear
I only wish I learned to listen
[ I let you down ]
I deserve to be punished
and I'm grounded, on to the bedroom floor
and I deserve to be embedded there
for I've caved into my own self delusion
I never had a smile like his
the ones that ripple on the top of a crooked mouth
I used to tuck myself underneath the skin
it's where I found his lightning seed
and somehow my body's been spread
where thunder hibernated inside my head
and I cried last night to the sound of distant drums
wishing he'd come back to me.