Translate my Undertongue's Language

[Laura]

I fell in love with nothing
crusting my hands edges
were the silver toenails I collected
and I dusted and I shifted
to time like you
to era with you

you wouldn't let me come home
I could never go home again.

I opened a book to page 19
and read about how a man was lost
and living in a lunged group
they shared the same air and they
let each other love each other loosen up
I'm leaving you
I'm lifting this weight

I gripped on to a falling star
would I plummet on an ending
frayed at the seams where I could
slip out and slide into another
and steal the hearts of many
screw it up again, I'm sure I would

I wanted to become ageless with you
to hold you
to change with you
as the factors factor in
from renaissance to romantic
to early 20s and late 60s
I wanted to grow old with you
even if we never changed faces

I wanted to mould with you
I wanted to collapse in you

but you would have never let me go home
I could never go home again.

[QueenPaige4]

hm...well....that was very well written...it didn't seem to flow in the beginning but then when i read further it began to make sense.

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300] That was excellent as per usual.

"I wanted to become ageless with you
to hold you
to change with you
as the factors factor in
from renaissance to romantic
to early 20s and late 60s
I wanted to grow old with you
even if we never changed faces"


.................I loved that part on so many levels, I can't even describe it. The thought of being ageless....the wording, fantastic.


". . .I shifted
to time like you
to era with you"


....................I just love your whole use of time throughout.


Excellent job on this. [/glow]

[Only Me]

i really liked how you repeated the line "but you would have never let me go home
I could never go home again. " at the end...