so slowly (the mountain poem)

[grifter]

so slowly (the mountain poem)

oldest mountains of earth
no wonder the people
speak
so
slowly
i transverse time
smoothed boulders
in locked closets while i
whisper sad sonnets
slowly
of
course
so
slowly
i know this spot
where i passed away
hugged in a shallow valley's
late foggy architecture
and i remember
sleepy love
so
slowly
and
slowly
so
i can feel like
the rocks and trees
wind swept and weathered
delicate and ancient
disappearing
so
slowly

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300] I really liked this. It flowed perfectly and there isn't a single change I would suggest. Great job.

"i can feel like
the rocks and trees
wind swept and weathered
delicate and ancient"

........This was my favorite part.[/glow]

[Laura]

"in locked closets while i
whisper sad sonnets
slowly
of
course
so
slowly
i know this spot
where i passed away"

--although I'm kind of unsure what this whole poem really means, at least to you, this part was great. The last two lines quoted make me smile

[Only Me]

I like the format the best it fit with the topic...

[grifter]

thank you ladies, i grew up, and still live in the appalachian moutains (i am 3,333 ft above sea level right now lol), these are some of the oldest mountains on the planet, they are worn down, no sharp peaks, just rounded mountain tops (i can't stand to be somewhere flat for more than a few days), i couldn't get a good flow, trying to mimic the round rolling mountains, but i did end up with peaks and valleys, i have a terrible southern drawl as well, i like to believe accents, are tied to the area of earth people live on, sorta like the land influencing us ....
peace love & empathy