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Post by Laura on Nov 21, 2005 20:18:03 GMT -6
a/n: needs revising, the ending seems unfinished. Thoughts appreciated. Thanks go to Bobby for the dragonfly inspiration.
Dragonfly
I'm sick of waiting for someone to feel the same my colours keep changing and I'm creating new shades all these blues make for who I am right now and if I had someone, I could make purple from the pink they'd blush me with
but for now, I stand alone.
I see myself flying through the years as one wonder if I should slow down and wait a while longer so I can pave a road, begin a journey with someone experience the 20s with a hand to hold
but I figure waiting could be longer than forever and if I stop I may never find a soul but if I keep forwarding - I may come across a face familiar yet unknown, a face to call my own
but for now I stand alone.
I used to think I needed someone to say:
"shed your skin - and break apart . . .
you don't need wings to fly"
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grifter
A Devoted Distraction
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Post by grifter on Nov 21, 2005 20:38:14 GMT -6
for sure don't change this "I'm sick of waiting for someone to feel the same my colours keep changing and I'm creating new shades all these blues make for who I am right now and if I had someone, I could make purple from the pink they'd blush me with"it feels like it has finality in the ending to me, but i don't matter, it's finished when you say it is ~
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Post by allmeheart on Nov 24, 2005 20:47:47 GMT -6
i think its a nice touch when a poem ends w/ words from another, i thought it was good, but thats just me
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Post by Only Me on Dec 4, 2005 0:58:57 GMT -6
"so I can pave a road, begin a journey with someone experience the 20s with a hand to hold" I really enjoyed this part!
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