elmarie
Contently A Distraction
Posts: 39
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Molds
Nov 5, 2005 16:32:08 GMT -6
Post by elmarie on Nov 5, 2005 16:32:08 GMT -6
im just sick of the uniform norm.
MOLDS inspired by john e
its a mold, really. cranberry sauce out of the can jello screaming cake pans whining cookie cutters wailing
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Molds
Nov 7, 2005 20:14:16 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Nov 7, 2005 20:14:16 GMT -6
[glow=black,2,300] It seems......incomplete. I don't know. For me, there wasn't really any true meaning behind it, or at least that I could tell. Sometimes, short poems are the most poignant, but this one was lacking. [/glow]
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elmarie
Contently A Distraction
Posts: 39
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Molds
Nov 7, 2005 20:34:18 GMT -6
Post by elmarie on Nov 7, 2005 20:34:18 GMT -6
i agree. the meaning behind was that i was sick of men. sick of make up and molds. el marie
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Molds
Nov 26, 2005 0:50:01 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Nov 26, 2005 0:50:01 GMT -6
seemed as though words were just thrown together and pasted in form, i think that this needs some work, a few more words would help to make the poem more understandable
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Molds
Nov 26, 2005 13:14:53 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Nov 26, 2005 13:14:53 GMT -6
"cookie cutters wailing"
--I liked this line. Although it does seem unfinished and unclear, I still think it leaves much to the imagination and I like to draw my own conclusions sometimes.
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Molds
Dec 4, 2005 1:32:58 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Dec 4, 2005 1:32:58 GMT -6
I get the feeling that you want to say more but your frustration has gotten the best of you and you can't even finish... you get what I am saying?
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