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Wish
Nov 1, 2005 18:17:51 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Nov 1, 2005 18:17:51 GMT -6
could I run through your fields? amber your cheeks and make you dance feetless? could you promise me the sky only seasons dreamless children? wish I could be somewhat like you.
have I given up on something I never knew of? ill tempered and scorned with tension my back can't carry why must I weigh so much with so little to speak for? wish I could smile like you.
if my tongue doesn't speak the words you long to hear could you empty your thoughts into me? next time I will open up in a new way and form your story wish I could feel like you.
why do my hands cradle tears? are my eyes leaking in front of strangers? is that why they just walk on passed me? wish I could fit in like you.
could I write endless words on your arms? cover your body in a rubbish only I can understand? could you hold me and tell me that I am beautiful if I just let it be? still, then wish I could believe you.
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Wish
Nov 1, 2005 19:04:47 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Nov 1, 2005 19:04:47 GMT -6
[glow=black,2,300] "why do my hands cradle tears? are my eyes leaking in front of strangers? is that why they just walk on passed me? wish I could fit in like you."
.....This was absolutely wonderful and that section simply lept from the computer screen. Excellent.....[/glow]
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Wish
Nov 4, 2005 16:18:51 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on Nov 4, 2005 16:18:51 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]ooo I liked that one! that was very nice! I loved how you ended it too, excellent choice of words ;D[/glow]
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Wish
Nov 26, 2005 0:48:37 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Nov 26, 2005 0:48:37 GMT -6
its very easy to picture this poem while reading it which is a desired affect, nice job
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Wish
Dec 4, 2005 1:34:43 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Dec 4, 2005 1:34:43 GMT -6
"if my tongue doesn't speak the words you long to hear could you empty your thoughts into me?" I like these lines best... i am unsure why...
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