Bitter Bunnies

[grifter]

Bitter Bunnies

i watch bitter bunnies hop
'round deserted parkin' lots
figure eights and Celtic knots
mermaid braids and colored chalk
got more holes than i have socks
but it's not the bunnies' fault
i hear rabid rabbits pray
far ahead of desert rains
for dandelions and tooth decay
for candy pains and lemon graves
got more thoughts than i have brains
but the bunnies aren't to blame

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300] That was interesting. It was definitely different, but I liked it. Nice job. [/glow]

[Laura]

"figure eights and Celtic knots
mermaid braids and colored chalk
got more holes than i have socks"

and

"far ahead of desert rains
for dandelions and tooth decay
for candy pains and lemon graves
got more thoughts than i have brains
but the bunnies aren't to blame"

--I guess that's basically the whole poem, but those above were my favourites. You use rhyme effectively and it's got this nice bounce to it but seems kind of melancholy, in a way. Interesting and definitely original.

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]this is probably not the message you intended on delivering but i'm going to say how i interpreted the poem anyway...

i thought of the bunnies as a symbol for kids and "the young ones" today... and how, some are just so distructive and overall misunderstood. [/glow]

but it's not the bunnies' fault

[glow=purple,2,300]it's not the kids' fault. [/glow]

hear rabid rabbits pray

[glow=purple,2,300]they're simply much influenced[/glow]