Map of My Existence

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300]This is a short piece inspired by www.oneword.com . I really do love that site, as far as for getting my creativity flowing.


As I look at this old piece of paper,
I finally realize what it is.
Its a roadmap for my life.
You've left it so that I know
exactly where to turn,
what exits to take,
and where to hit the rest stops
in order to end up exactly where you want me.
There is no road that will
lead me to my dreams
as you have drawn it,
only roads leading to yours.
I have to ask myself,
do I want you to live vicariously through me?
I want to live my own life,
follow my own dreams,
so I discard your map and start a new one.
This one has no specific destination
it is simply a documentation
of where the road of life has taken me.
Roads intertwine and converge
in various intersections and crossroads.
To you, it may seem like the path of chaos,
but to me, it is bliss.



What do you think? Its the first thing I've written in a while. [/glow]

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]what i like about your writing is... how you take the time to make sure that there are no or very minimal amount of grammar/spelling errors. it allows the reader to see the message of the poem with no distractions of misspellings and such.

i really liked this piece, how you compared the set plan that was made for you... to a map.. and this piece was just great and i'm sure you know that yourself. excellent work.

(oh by the way, might want to change "Existance" to Existence) [/glow]

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300] Aww, thanks Sharon. I'm really glad you liked it.

"(oh by the way, might want to change "Existance" to Existence)" *blush* oops, will do. [/glow]

[Laura]

"do I want you to live vicariously through me?"

--I have pondered this question to some individuals

[allmeheart]

good poem, i liked it, i think its kool how you provide a background to most of ur work

[Only Me]

i love your "one minute" pieces inspired by oneword! They are always so detailed