elmarie
Contently A Distraction
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Post by elmarie on Oct 13, 2005 14:20:40 GMT -6
Can You Hear Me? by El marie wrote it this past april i think. some guys and bad influences and senseless horniness. and trying to fit in.
I let myself fall again I fell onto the bed, Into your arms I'm screaming Can you hear me? I don't want this I don't want you Can you hear me?
I'm not like this I'm not a sl*t I'm screaming Can you hear me?
You treat me like a queen You shower me with kisses You kiss me, and I turn away
Can't you hear me? I'm not a rebound You didn't pick me up one the corner In a sexy mini and fishnets I'm screaming But you can't hear me
You see him. You love him. You don't love this pig Can you hear me? Leave! Free yourself while you can I'm screaming but you can't hear me
he gave you Trojans for your birthday NO!!!! GO AWAY!!! but you can't hear me
You don't love him You love Dylan and you know it. So run! But your not listening
Your too busy, sucking his tounge, to care about yourself
I'm screaming. i'm crying. I'm kicking. Trying to break through
Can you hear me? You're all I have, and i'm all you'll get So respect me, dont abuse me. pamper me, dont punish me love me, don't treat me like dirt
I am you. You are me. Now can you hear me?
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elmarie
Contently A Distraction
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Post by elmarie on Oct 17, 2005 17:41:16 GMT -6
anyone???
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Post by Sharon on Oct 17, 2005 20:30:26 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]please change the color of this font... it's incredibly difficult to read[/glow]
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elmarie
Contently A Distraction
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Post by elmarie on Nov 12, 2005 20:17:57 GMT -6
okay
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Post by Laura on Nov 29, 2005 20:48:19 GMT -6
Although the middle seemed a lot more like an angry telephone call to a friend ... I enjoyed this:
"Into your arms I'm screaming Can you hear me? I don't want this I don't want you"
--it kind of sounds like you were being pressured to have sex or do something close to it, but you didn't say anything, yet inside you were crying, and you wanted him to know. You wanted him to be able to read your eyes and know you didn't want it. That's what I got from this.
And this:
"You're too busy, sucking his tounge, to care about yourself"
--I like the idea ... even though it's kind of graphic, I still like it.
The ending:
"don't punish me love me, don't treat me like dirt
I am you. You are me. Now can you hear me?"
--I like the idea of this too. I'm sorry that you made some bad decisions but they shape you. They will help you learn and grow. As much as you hate it now, hate it later, hate it forever ... it will always be a part of who you become no matter how bad it was at the time.
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Post by Only Me on Dec 4, 2005 1:25:25 GMT -6
well, being as ocd as I am I am going to be the one to point out... Your is the possesive form, You're is the active form. "But your not listening" "Your too busy," It is a very common mistake and I have fallen victim to misusing them as well. Other than that I love the poem and have no complaints...
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