tommy
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by tommy on Jul 20, 2005 6:45:27 GMT -6
Destruction
Destruction, devotion, deception, Emotion, reliance, compliance, revulsion, compulsion, Relationships, heartache, save face, be straight, be good, be nice, you should, no sense, hopeless, hapless, trapped…yes, control, don’t know, which way, what hole, climb down, let down, sit down, fly down, put down.
So many words. They mean nothing to you I’m sure, but they are my mind. The triggers of a thousand guns pointed at the paper which holds there real meaning. But why do it, what for? But to explain myself duly. For the help and hope of others who fail to understand. the meaning of a mind. Of my mind. So misunderstood. Really no need to bother. Acceptance is hard to find.
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Post by Absinthe on Jul 20, 2005 9:28:27 GMT -6
That was really good. I can totally relate. My mind is a chaotic mess of thoughts about everythign and nothing all at the same time. Excellent job
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Post by Sharon on Jul 20, 2005 20:46:55 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]wow.[/glow]
[glow=purple,2,300]that part really stuck out for me. good job! ;D
one other thing though... i'm not sure if you did that on purpose but i think you meant "Destruction" for your title.[/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:03:45 GMT -6
*claps* wow, great job, i loved the beginning, you could almost make a song out of the whole thing
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Post by Only Me on Sept 17, 2005 13:35:53 GMT -6
"holds there real " I think it is supposed to be their... ... I was raised by a college English professor who would correct all of my work both before and AFTER my teachers would... sorry if i seem a little obsessive about it...
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Post by Laura on Oct 4, 2005 11:00:56 GMT -6
The ending was great. I also liked:
"who fail to understand. the meaning of a mind"
--I know how the next line is "my mind" but I loved how it's "a mind" here.
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