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Post by Only Me on Jun 14, 2005 18:05:27 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]Ok I wrote this a while back... hope you all like it... Its kind of scattered... and though you may not get the meaning, writing it helped me get through a rough time in my life. [/glow]
[glow=red,2,300]Every night I dream of you Dream of what life would have been What it would have been were you with me still Reality is my fatality Living a lie, hoping to die Fake people surround me Happiness, a far away island Only few can see it, some never reach it I lie in the grass Lie next to the plaque The one that reads your name Stare up at the sky Wish on the stars Wishing for you to come back Fifteen years Slowly gone by Every night looking to the sky Every night wishing on the stars Every day passes and still your gone Gone from me forever [/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on Jun 14, 2005 18:43:15 GMT -6
thats good, really well written i liked it, made sense to me, suggestions, just grammar
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Post by Samccaleb on Sept 10, 2005 19:43:40 GMT -6
Wow L...good stuff.
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Post by Sharon on Sept 23, 2005 16:43:07 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]love how you ended it, very nice.[/glow]
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Post by Only Me on Sept 27, 2005 23:18:41 GMT -6
thank you all so much. this was a very hard piece for me to write... thanks for the feedback.
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