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Post by NotSoPerfect on Apr 21, 2005 20:56:08 GMT -6
when all the world has turned its back and here we lie, alone to cope clinging to each other's lacks fulfilling them with dreams of hope when love is nothing more than mist greed and envy rule all lips are blessed when they are kissed after summer dawns the fall.
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Fluffyjackal
A Dedicated Distraction
I respectfully decline the invitation to join your hallucination.
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Post by Fluffyjackal on Apr 22, 2005 5:52:23 GMT -6
Aw, I think this is a very sweet poem. By the way, what does 'Lo siento' mean?
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Post by NotSoPerfect on Apr 22, 2005 14:30:43 GMT -6
"i'm sorry" in spanish.
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Post by Angelamongsociety on Apr 23, 2005 18:36:23 GMT -6
Good I like it. It has a true meaning to it. Nice job
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Post by Sharon on Apr 27, 2005 14:15:48 GMT -6
fulfilling them with dreams of hope that part sticks out for me, thank you for sharing
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Post by allmeheart on Apr 27, 2005 19:23:58 GMT -6
very good, I really like that, *claps* quite logical, always nice, only suggestion is to interpret the title somewhere either in the poem or in the topic title its self
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 31, 2005 21:50:38 GMT -6
[glow=black,2,300]I thought this was pretty good, except....
"greed and envy rule all"
That is a great line...meaningful in many ways, but for me it threw the rythm off a bit. Otherwise, this is great. [/glow]
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Post by Laura on Dec 18, 2005 18:43:53 GMT -6
" lips are blessed when they are kissed after summer dawns the fall." --this was beautifully written. Just the idea of being blessed by a kiss, so amazing and incredible. It was a nice short read and good rhymes. lovely.
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