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Post by Absinthe on Jul 19, 2005 17:21:17 GMT -6
That soft sweet melody
ringing in my ears
The joyful words and carelessness
calling forth my tears
I never knew such sweet soft words
could break my heart this way
The sickly sweetness tortures me
on every waking day
Angel wings and faerie dreams
a blue bright beautiful sky
Masking all my pain and fear
in an unsung lullaby
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Post by Sharon on Jul 19, 2005 17:43:47 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]words seems so contradicting yet, they seem to belong together, i love it  welcome to S.D. i hope to see more of your work in the future.[/glow] |
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Post by Absinthe on Jul 28, 2005 15:48:59 GMT -6
Thanks, Sharon
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Jul 28, 2005 16:03:22 GMT -6
wow just wow
It was more than wonderful and beautiful at the same time
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Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:29:57 GMT -6
amazing, wonderful, wow, it was short but it was great, i couldn't give a suggestion for this poem even if i had wanted to
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 12, 2005 12:49:02 GMT -6
Thank you guys...er...girls...lol
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Post by Laura on Nov 28, 2005 16:55:26 GMT -6
I really liked these lines:
"I never knew such sweet soft words
could break my heart this way
The sickly sweetness tortures me
on every waking day"
--at first read I didn't like the last line of that stanza because the rhyme was obvious but I reread it and I liked it. I like the wordings of sickly sweet...
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Post by Only Me on Dec 4, 2005 1:29:46 GMT -6
wow... was this one of your first posts? how did I ever miss it?
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