"March to the Sea"

[allmeheart]

They march on
Marching to the sea
Determined to make a mark in history

Burning all within sight
From Atlanta to Savannah
Georgians live in fright

They march on
People hope, People pray
That Sherman's feelings, they would sway

Sure to be told Lincoln received a gift
Savannah is saved!
And burdened spirits lift

They no longer march
And the war comes to an end
May this torn country begin to mend

Listen to the message
The message that was sent
Defeat sometimes conquers, but that wasn't how things went.

I decided to write a poem w/ a more historic background. I'm not sure how this worked, or if it was interesting. It is only that I have always been interested in Sherman's march. I do live in GA so I suppose that contributes to the reason. I figured this would be something different, please leave f/b and constructive criticism.

~Jessica~

[Laura]

It was okay ... it needs a bit of work but I like how you wrote something about history, it's neat.

"They no longer march
And the war comes to an end
May this torn country begin to mend "

--the best stanza because the last line is beautiful

[Sharon]

yes, writing something based on historical background is always cool to see. personally, i think that the rhyming kind of gave the ideas a cut-off feeling. the poem was good, though it can be better. perhaps some more use of punctuation will give it a better flow as well.

[Only Me]

I really like how you did it, though it did seem incomplete. History has never been a strong point of mine, but if I had heard it in a poetic sense I may have paid a little more attention and learned a little more...