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Jul 14, 2007 13:54:42 GMT -6
Post by NotSoPerfect on Jul 14, 2007 13:54:42 GMT -6
i am relentless in my pursuit unfaltering in my affection you create my world with one look and destroy it with one phrase
clinging so desperately to what could never truly exist a fib to follow a fable the definition of what we've always been
star-crossed or destined; your favorite explanations but hopelessly faithful explains more accurately
with ample opportunities to escape we've tried quite unsuccessfully the midnight phone calls never cease to be unexpectedly expected
the most devastating blow the shameful self-realization this chase will never end i'm addicted to abuse
and there's no one to blame but me
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Chrono
A Devoted Distraction
It as the at point which we think we know the most that we truly know the least.
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Jul 14, 2007 18:09:22 GMT -6
Post by Chrono on Jul 14, 2007 18:09:22 GMT -6
This poem is quite interesting. It really puts an interesting view on those relationships which exist because neither of the persons in it can end it. One of my favorite lines in it is, "A fib to follow a fable" I like it, for starters, because of the great alliteration in it and also because of its' significance in the poem. A fib to follow a fable; its saying how the relationship in based on lies.
The next stanza really adds to that line's meaning when talking about how one of the people in the relationship keeps saying how it divine fate that they met and are together, but the other person feels the truth is that they are just together because neither has the strength to leave the other.
Another thing I like about this poems is that each stanza creates a meaning which the next one represents. Like in my earlier example of a fib to follow a fable. The next stanza really explains that. Then that stanza is further explained by the next stanza. There is just a really good flow throughout the poem.
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Jul 15, 2007 0:43:07 GMT -6
Post by NotSoPerfect on Jul 15, 2007 0:43:07 GMT -6
Thanks, it means a lot to me that you understood it the way that you did.
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Jul 19, 2007 14:05:07 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Jul 19, 2007 14:05:07 GMT -6
This poem was very interesting and I agree with Chrono. But my favorite lines are "you create my world with one look and destroy it with one phrase" That just explains so much. It explains that anything can happen with anything that anyone says. It says that with just one sentence your world can become complete chaos. This poem has more meaning to it and it is so much more than what Chrono said but I just can't seem to find the words to describe it. Seriously I am in complete awe.
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Jun 16, 2008 22:51:54 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Jun 16, 2008 22:51:54 GMT -6
Buggering Hell, NotSo - get out of my head! This hits very close to home for me. It makes me think of the situation I've been in with Adam (the one I wrote "You" about). The first stanza is heartwrenching in it's accurate portrayal of unrequited feeling. No matter what he does wrong, I can't seem to bring myself to think any less of him. Whenever my life is going badly/well/just going, all I want is for him to know about it - to tell me I did well/things will get better/life can be certain ways sometimes. He could crush me with a single word and that's effing terrifying. In the second stanza; " clinging so desperately to what could never truly exist a fib to follow a fable" . . . These words just make me speechless because of how right they are. Though I have to say, the ending is what did it for me: " this chase will never end I'm addicted to abuse
and there's no one to blame but me" . . . Adam and I have been dancing around each other for over a year. I've resigned myself to the realization that it probably will never happen, but still I find myself giddy with happiness when he calls or visits me at work. Anyway, thank you for writing this. I've been trying to say it myself for a while, but haven't been able to. I'm glad you could say it for me.
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