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Post by Cullen on Jan 18, 2007 23:47:50 GMT -6
Again with the french "the fields of my heart" This is the definition of broken love, if you look deep enough See this chick rejects me, i dont give up, she dumps her boyfriend, but i have moved on, and thus this poem comes into bieng (in one line it refers to a dance [prom] so everyone gets the seriousness about this bieng somewhat relating to stuff that happened)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~` Turmoil resumes this forgotten ground Under which the bleeding heart resounds My heart is a battlefield, a broken moor Rejection and heartbreak are the weapons of war
As a cannonball screams as does my pain Praying once more for the soothing rain I fight these sins, Envy Lust and Wrath Hoping to find the one true path
Envy would not die Not fade away Untill soon forgotten, yesterday Chaos resumed its once rightfull place Hurtling my heart back into space
In This battle, not once, should i take the the chance One last hope, a delicate dance Risk it all on the roll of a dice For her and a chance of paradise
Or listen to logic, rhyme with reason Nay! this would be an infinate treason The choice is here and here it stays For me to make in the following days
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Post by Absinthe on Jan 27, 2007 22:06:28 GMT -6
Hmm...the ending kind of just drizzled off....like, it did't do the rest of the poem justice. But otherwise, this isn't bad
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Post by Cullen on Feb 11, 2007 0:43:20 GMT -6
Yeah, I noticed that too when I wrote it, and I guess I never went back and fixed it.
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