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[xxrebel86xx]

You were such a perfect little disater,
Created by some evil.
Not one soul cared,
But I was there.
Diseased,
That's what you are.
Nothing more...
Nothing less...
Created by some evilness.
You'll never change.

[Laura]

It needs work ... it's not developed enough, but you're young. There's a lot of time to grow. "Evilness" sounds out of place, kind of too childish or joke-like. I don't really understand how you talk about how they're so evil but you were there ... hmm ... with some TLC, this could be good. Keep at it.