I Hate You By *Bren*

[stupidxgirl]

A/n: This is certainly not my best, and isn't very creative at all. But I thought it had some nice parts, and some potential. It took about 15 minutes to write, so possibly if I went back over it I could make it better. It's not happy like my others- It's to an ex LoL. But like I said, it's not my best. It's just a lot of thoughts thrown into one. Normally I don't use swear words in my poetry, but it added a lot for me personally. Hope someone can find the goodness here besides me

Perfect eyes will
hide perfect hate;;

And believe me
I hate
you
for being
yourself-

and I hate
myself for sticking
to what
you spread over
my prettied-up face.

I shivered in that light
that enchantment.
that blinding hope.

and it meant
nothing to you-

Dirty smiles
dirty words and
meanings
and suggestions-
dirty,
just so god damn
dirty.

and I hate
you
for being
yourself
and me
for being
your puppet.

I hate
you for your
experience
and your hands
your lips
your eyes-

Your disgusting
stare through my soul
eyes.

That I looked to
for answers
when I knew your
words were bullshit-
but they were bullshit
too-

And believe me
I hate you
for not caring
about me
like you said you
always would.

I was promised
the world-
but you took
my naive child-like
heart and ran with it
instead.

And I hate
myself for
believing in
that blubbering
heart under
your tired skin </3

[Laura]

I agree it's not your best but I did like:

"Dirty smiles
dirty words and
meanings
and suggestions-
dirty,
just so god damn
dirty."

--repetition of "dirty" works here. Also,

"I hate
you for your
experience
and your hands
your lips
your eyes-"

--many can relate to this. It always means more when you're talking about a previous relationship instead of just a normal friendship because their lips, their hands, etc mean more to you because you felt them. I don't know how to describe it ... it's early. Good job though.

[allmeheart]

now thats what i call revenge lol, jking, i liked this, it w/out a doubt showed emotion, nice work here

[Only Me]

it flows well... great imagery... great repitition of some words... good job!

[thecrazybeautiful]

"I hate
you for your
experience
and your hands
your lips
your eyes-

Your disgusting
stare through my soul
eyes."

Ooh, I could never say I hated a guy for his hands... Lol. But that part was good, I thought. Nice description for eyes.

All in all, it's a pretty good poem. I like it.