To the one I love to hate

[xxrebel86xx]

I can't fight the fact your gone,
Because every time I do,
I miss the chance I had with you.

Hiding behind my emotions,
Wanting to say how I feel,
When the words won't come out.

Hiding away my past,
from everything that I haven't said,
Because when I'm saying hello,

You're saying good-bye.

And the simple reason,
I would love to hate you,
So the words come out easily.

I would love to hate you,
Because I can't the words.
I would love to hate you,
Even though your gone.

I wanted to be the one,
Who could change her life,
So you'd be happy.

I wanted to say good-bye,
Instead of hello,
Just to watch you go.

I wanted you to know,
How much I cared,
Even though you've changed.

Knowing that everything,
I once said,
Couldn't change what I wanted to say.

Now you can't say a thing,
Knowing that I care.
When my past slowly falls,
Into my mistake.

[Only Me]

"fact your gone" in the first line, your should be you're or you are because it is not possessive. And I think that there should be a 'that' after fact but that is my own opinion

"Because I can't the words." is there another word that is supposed to be in this line that maybe you forgot to add? I have a tendency to leave words out when I am typing sometimes too, and this just seems like it could be one of those times. I am tired and being picky right now but the next time I read your poem I may have better things to say about it.It is good. I like it, a bit choppy but it gives in to the emotions of wanting to hate somebody... oh yea, and it was dedicated to me lol. I thought that was kind of funnny.... but others might not

[Laura]

"Because when I'm saying hello,

You're saying good-bye"

--I liked this idea. Missing word like "split" said. It wasn't bad but not a favourite of mine either. Keep posting