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Post by xxrebel86xx on Feb 22, 2006 6:45:38 GMT -6
I feel stupid, Crazy is more like it. I haven't felt this way in a while, And it's taking me whole. I trust you, Believe in you, I just wanna be with you. But I tend to take it over the edge, Thinking that things, Like love, Last forever. I love you so much, 5 years of being friends has changed us. And I'm liking it, But when distance gets in the way, I started to wonder; Is he cheating on me? What is he doing? Does he even love me? I don't know why, I think these ways, Maybe its just me, Or the fact we never really talk, Anymore. I miss you, I love you, I wanna be with you. But I don't know what to think, When its between you and me.
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Post by Laura on Feb 23, 2006 15:35:36 GMT -6
"But I tend to take it over the edge, Thinking that things, Like love, Last forever."
--this is nice but most of the rest sounded too young and more like you were saying it to him. It doesn't seem as expressive as it could have been and in parts like this:
"Is he cheating on me? What is he doing?"
--it breaks the feeling.
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Post by xxrebel86xx on Feb 23, 2006 17:00:30 GMT -6
its just my feelings i guess...i really dont plan out what im going to write....
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on Feb 26, 2006 16:10:34 GMT -6
Alot of people don't plan what they write. They just let it out, but in a creative way.
About the poem. I also like the part:
"I just wanna be with you. But I tend to take it over the edge, Thinking that things, Like love, Last forever."
It reminds me of myself a little.
It's not the best poem, but it's alright.
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stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
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Post by stupidxgirl on Mar 1, 2006 0:06:00 GMT -6
I agree with Laura, but it was still nice to read your feelings. Nice job dear.
Bren
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