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Dec 25, 2005 22:03:20 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Dec 25, 2005 22:03:20 GMT -6
you can cry my sleeve will soak up your tears and you can confess interrupt yourself you can rant until your tongue twists you can fall asleep my arms will hold you, cradle you you can forget mess yourself up you can doubt and down and self inflict you can reflect my ears will eat your words you can hurt you can open up and you can rain and invade and distress you can distrust you can harm yourself you can fall to pieces fall apart fall into yourself my soul will warm you you can miss and you can feel you can lash out or you can die my life will keep you alive
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Jan 19, 2006 0:56:49 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Jan 19, 2006 0:56:49 GMT -6
I really felt the emotion in these lines "you can miss and you can feel you can lash out or you can die my life will keep you alive " I felt it throughout the entire thing but I could feel it more strongly here than anywhere else.
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Feb 2, 2006 16:36:41 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Feb 2, 2006 16:36:41 GMT -6
nice ending line, tied things together and summed it all up, at first i thought it might be too many yous but that was just at a glance, when i read it though it flowed quite well, nicely done
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