February Morning

[Laura]

a/n: here's my attempt at rhyme (I know I've rhymed in the past but usually it's not on purpose)

February Morning

Evidence, you bring me to my knees
every time there's a problem you never rescue me
and you're supposed to be my friend
the one I run to when life's about to end

but you just smile at me and say:

"I never made you this way"

it always begins like this
a February morning with no last night kiss
my cheek resting upon his lying lips
his hand stuck like honey to my hips

who can save me from this?

it's not a beginning, I know
a love undying, impossible feelings that die to show
it's aching after Tuesday sex
it's loving but never love I get

and it could be a mystery
floating between his mind and my vulnerability
my eyes focused yet still unable to see
just a February morning, dry and unclean

and he still smiles when he stares at me

you just smile and say

"I never made you this way"

[Only Me]

"it always begins like this
a February morning with no last night kiss
my cheek resting upon his lying lips
his hand stuck like honey to my hips"
That is some powerful imagery! Good job...
"I never made you this way"
I love how you repeat this line

[stupidxgirl]

I really liked this. I normally don't like poems that rhyme. But this one was very emotional, and had excellent wording.

"it always begins like this
a February morning with no last night kiss
my cheek resting upon his lying lips
his hand stuck like honey to my hips

who can save me from this?"

That was by far my favorite part Wonderful job dear.
Bren

[allmeheart]

your attempt at rhyming certainly paid off that was a wonderful piece, i have no suggestions for it, just keep up the good work, thats all i ask, i love reading your works, lol you've got a fan