Wish You Were Here

[Laura]

a/n: this isn't that new, probably the summer of this year, but I'm feeling this again so I thought I would share it.

Wish You Were Here

(oh) how the blueness of the sky reflects itself on to the sand
and (oh) how it evaporates in a second
those clouds are spooky when you're lying faceless
tear-stained covers wrapped around a body breaking from the rain
that just started to fall so unwillingly

and why is it that when I wish you disappear
as if you know what I'm going to say
how could you have left without your coat?

(oh) the face you made when I used to dance
and (oh) you used to believe in more than realism
those endless roads we used to drive on
and we used to watch the time fly by
now we're just too old to go back and time's precious

(oh) it seems I'm falling apart because of you
and (oh) maybe it's because of me too
trying to remember how life goes but we're too busy fighting
creating a war that doesn't exist in our heads just to get us talking
again, what are we yelling for?

and why is it that when I wish you crumble down
as if my thoughts disappoint you in some way
how could you leave without your radio?

(oh) you were the one thing I could rely on when I needed to
and (oh) how I wish you were here still

but why is it that when I wish you're never there?
how could you leave without me?

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]oh wow, i love how you tied it together at the end.[/glow]

how could you leave without me?

[glow=purple,2,300]i loved it, simply a heartfelt piece, very very nice job. [/glow]

[Only Me]

I agree with Sharon the way you tied it all in at the end was wonderful. I also think that the (oh)'s added to the feelings of the poem. Great job!

[allmeheart]

very interesting, i liked one of the beginning lines the most, the one where you used both tears and rain in the same sentence, i have a thing for water/liquid references in poems, nicely done i must say