Sweet Sorrows

[QueenPaige4]

Dear Man I know I want to be with you
I want to be in your arms
You just fucked up
I hope you're happy with her
I'll be happy with him
I really do like him
but he knows I'm not over you
It's just goign to take a couple of days
I tried to hid the pain
that was stuck inside
these Beautiful Blue eyes
It's so hard
I gave you the best 6 days of my life
Okay maybe not
but I still had fun with you
I'm going to miss it
But the best thing for me to thinks is that
I can make new good memories with him
And I'll keep our good memories in this box
with nothing but all the tears I cried
And the sweet songs of love

[allmeheart]

it was good but hmm, needs to be revised for spelling errors etc. and at the beginning i wouldnt start w/ dear man, change man add some more detail makes it better more personal etc.

[Only Me]

i like how it says the best 6 days of my life... it shows that even though you were only with this person for 6 days you still cared for him and he hurt you in a way that you still remember even though you are with someone else now... great job in capturing the moment..

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]wow, i can't believe i missed this one. i liked it. [/glow]

[Laura]

"I tried to hid the pain
that was stuck inside
these Beautiful Blue eyes"

--this part stuck out among the rest for me.

[QueenPaige4]

thank you so much....i appreciate everything