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[QueenPaige4]

While my heart is slowly breaking
you are saying good bye
And I'm watching you leave.
You are miles away
I can't seem to reach you
I'm trying to hide everything from you
So you don't get hurt by me
I'm afraid of making you run away
and leave me alone to sit here and cry
As you disappear, you're walking out of my heart
out of my life, forever
You're gone now
All I have are these memories
and tears inside this box
With my broken hearted blood
and you don't care
that I'm sitting here
Crying over you
I'm walking away with tears in my eyes
While you're saying
go to hell, just die
and no one likes you.

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]depressing.. but hey, that's the emotion you were trying to produce right? i think you should find a title for this piece. after reading it, i thought the word "Unwanted"

thank you for sharing [/glow]

[QueenPaige4]

thank you for the help of the name. I hardly ever name my pieces mostly cause there is no names i can come up with but anyway thank you once again and have a nice day

[Absinthe]

Hmm....It was quite depressing, wasn't it? That's a good thing, though. It's agreat poem, and from what I've read of yours so far, I think you have a bit of talent. Keep up the good work.

[tommy]

i totally felt what you put across. i agree with the name issues, as it was very...sombre, and something this strong deserves a name. great job

[allmeheart]

reminds me of something a friend of mine wrote, nice job i liked it, i agree it needs a title though, if i had a suggestion i would say so, sorry i dont

[Only Me]

To watch the one you love disappear out of your life is like watching the world come to an end and your the only one left who survived... which isnt a good thing cause being alone is very ... well... lonely... as for a title... he walked out of my life? watching you walk away? the drop off.. sorry thats just something my little 10 y/o cousin said when she asked my aunt when she was going to give her boyfriend the "drop-off" smile it really does get better...

[QueenPaige4]

Thank you all for the help and support. As for the name well its Unwanted like Sharon suggested. Only cause well thats the feeling i had when i wrote this piece. Once again thank you