she was light

[suicidetank]

She


The day you called out on the highway
Is the day I remember best walking home
With you underneath a placid sky
Run around up and down
You always were such a clown
Always there when I would rise
Every day was a surprise
You’d scratch me up we’d have our fight’s
Behind and under anywhere you could hide
There you were away from sight
You’d always pout when I was out
You would always make me smile
I loved you despite the mess
And I’d hug you when in distress
You wouldn’t eat unless I was there
I remember your funny colored hair
You always kept me from the negative
You’d always scold me for being late
While you were here is when she still loved me
Now this is the way things remain
I’ll have another lonely day
You broke three hearts the day you went away
The fool the coward and the dreamer
I like to think that you wont take long
In the hopes that one-day you will return
Wishful thinking though I know the truth
What did you go in search of so far away from us?

[allmeheart]

interesting, grabs my attention, thats what most writers attempt to do, w/ this poem you've succeeded

[Only Me]

I think my only complaint was the ryhming, if your going to ryhme make a pattern of it... don't do random ryhming. it messes with the flow... but thats just my opinion, if you like it and if it flows for you then go with it...

[Sharon]

I loved you despite the mess
And I’d hug you when in distress
You wouldn’t eat unless I was there
I remember your funny colored hair
You always kept me from the negative
You’d always scold me for being late

[glow=purple,2,300]there is something about these lines that i found so... CUTE! hehe ;D[/glow]