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May 2, 2005 22:02:47 GMT -6
Post by NotSoPerfect on May 2, 2005 22:02:47 GMT -6
from.... seventy thousand years ago.
it gets so hard to simply live knowing you're alive its even harder just to breathe ’cause part of you has died it cuts me deep to see you smile when all the tears i cried collect in pools at my feet even though you tried to make that hurt more tolerable on those attempts, you lied one time again, and twice, then thrice those lies just helped deride me and right now my only wish: for my love to subside.
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May 9, 2005 13:49:21 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on May 9, 2005 13:49:21 GMT -6
love is such a complicated emotion. there's this line from a song that this poem reminded me of, it goes:
"there's a danger in loving somebody too much and it's sad when you know it's your heart you can't trust"
i can tell there's a deep emotion behind this poem and whether it's from your own experience or not, you delivered it well
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May 10, 2005 17:51:27 GMT -6
Post by XoXo_Branden_XoXo on May 10, 2005 17:51:27 GMT -6
I feel the emotion. Plus very well written.
Nice job, keep it up.
xoxo branden xoxo
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May 11, 2005 18:44:27 GMT -6
Post by Angelamongsociety on May 11, 2005 18:44:27 GMT -6
Good job. I can realy relate to that!
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May 23, 2005 21:03:35 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on May 23, 2005 21:03:35 GMT -6
great job, keep writing, i like to r&r your work, this was interesting to me
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Sept 2, 2005 23:23:06 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Sept 2, 2005 23:23:06 GMT -6
I think reading other peoples work sure puts things into perspective for me. Thank you for that. I really like this poem, my favorite line is "it cuts me deep to see you smile when all the tears i cried collect in pools at my feet " I dont know why but these lines really get to me.. cause I have felt like this SO many times...
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Sept 4, 2005 11:18:46 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Sept 4, 2005 11:18:46 GMT -6
"it cuts me deep to see you smile"
--I really liked this line. I understand where you're coming from here so it's nice to relate to others work.
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