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Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 9, 2005 4:48:06 GMT -6
Looking up at the sky wondering if I should get high. Losing sight of you you're walking away Your back is towards me and tears are rolling down my cheeks Laying on the ground thinking you're an idiot for only dating her cause she needs you Instead of being with me and being happy. You're still an idiot and I still love you But do you care? Do you notice me not there? You're pushing me away everytime you say that you don't want to be happy Now I just want to die Now I'm wanting to lie about everything including my life Thinking I deserve to die knowing im only living for myself and everyone else Soon I'll be okay but it doesnt matter anyway.
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BlueMoon
A Dedicated Distraction
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Post by BlueMoon on Jun 9, 2005 17:08:51 GMT -6
Wow. I really liked this poem. I think it all came together nicely. Good job.
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Post by Only Me on Jun 14, 2005 0:33:11 GMT -6
even though it rhymes its put together really well... I dont usually like rhyming pieces but this one is really good... sometimes we just cant help but make things rhyme... I do it in my own poetry as well... ;-) keep writing...
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Post by allmeheart on Jun 14, 2005 18:59:23 GMT -6
i liked it, very good job, it rhymed, i rhyme sometimes so its not something i detest
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