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Post by QueenPaige4 on May 30, 2005 10:08:49 GMT -6
Are You Happy?I'm sitting on the floor Thinking of you on the phone With another girl You're talking about me And it's really bad I'm starting to cry The phone rings It's you I'm not going to be jealous I'm not going to ask you questions I'm going to keep silent I'm frightened I don't want to lose you Now you're gone You made a mistake I can't believe I fell for your game You got fooled by her You lied to me Now all I want to do Is to kill you Or just cry Cry till I fucking bleed Cry till I fucking scream I didn't love you I just liked you severly And now you're with That slutty bitch I hope you're fucking Happy
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Post by Sharon on May 30, 2005 10:29:22 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]wow see... normally i don't like it when people use curse words in their poetry. i think it's because the ones i have seen are of people using curse words just to fill in spaces which is obviously not the case in this one. you used them to express which is what poetry all about. thank you for sharing that with us. [/glow]
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lockely
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Post by lockely on Jun 1, 2005 7:27:09 GMT -6
i really like it it reminds me of a relationship one of my friend just got out of, describes it perfectly! lol i espescially liked this bit... people always say it's lust, but i think you found a great way of describing it on another level.. I didn't love you I just liked you severly just one question. i was wondering if you could tell me what personty means.. i've never heard that said before.
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Post by allmeheart on Jun 2, 2005 8:52:59 GMT -6
hmm interesting, very nice, i would say, profanity, was a nice touch, didnt show just plain anger etc.
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Post by Only Me on Sept 17, 2005 12:44:19 GMT -6
the profanity added to the anger being portrayed... its like you weren't just mad, you were to use a light term.. issed off... nice touch
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Sept 17, 2005 15:34:45 GMT -6
thank you very much.
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