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Post by Absinthe on Jul 19, 2005 17:40:16 GMT -6
You've held the key to my heart For so long.
But me, being me; Much too practical for my own good,
I changed the locks.
[What you don't know is that your Key will still open the door]
I slammed that door right in your face, Thinking that we were better off.
"We can't" I said. "This isn't right."
You told me I needed to let go, To let my heart lead me
But you don't understand. I did let my heart lead me.
[It led me to you, didn't it?]
But I was too sheltered, Too naive to realize what I had in you.
My heart may have longed for you, But in my mind....
But, oh, how my heart pines for you now, It begs me daily to give in.
But I know that I’ve hurt you too badly, To come crawling back.
[It’s not about my pride anymore, Or even about my emotions.]
It’s about you now. And the fact that you’ve moved on.
Seeing you with her feels As if I’ve been pierced through the heart.
I wish I could turn back the time, To make it alright again.
[But time does not bend, For unfortunate lovers]
Time swiftly moves on, As my heart breaks bit by bit.
I ask myself why. Why did I ever give up on you?
I guess now I’ll never know.
[And you’ll be left with her, Unaware of how my heart aches]
And that’s the way it should be.
*Any comments and such are greatly appreciated, though I'm not partial to flaming. Constructive criticism is great, but there is a line that needs to be drawn.....please don't cross it.*
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Post by Sharon on Jul 19, 2005 17:49:56 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]very interesting, i loved how you used 'lock and key' as a metaphor. "Key to my heart" i've heard that line so many times before but i liked how you used it. good job [/glow]
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Post by Angelamongsociety on Jul 22, 2005 18:12:31 GMT -6
I like this poem. I can kinda relate to it. A lost love that isn't realy lost. Great job
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Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:10:27 GMT -6
spins a new twist on the expression "key to my heart" nicely done, i would like to point out only one thing alright should be all right, thats all i saw, no big deal though
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