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Post by XoXo_Branden_XoXo on May 14, 2005 22:04:01 GMT -6
Wrote this tonite. Has to deal with my girlfriend. Noting to do with breaking upm but something thats happening and we are fighting through it together.
River of blood-
I have been stabbed. Piece of my heart bleeds. Undenying flow of a river. Hurt and saddend. But theres a tunnel. At the end a shinning light. This wound in my heart. Has this chance. Chance to heal. Right and true its up to her. She has the will power. Strength and determination. To fight the horrible urge. To heal this mortal wound. River of blood slowly flows. But the deadend, quickly awaits.
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Post by Sharon on May 15, 2005 10:11:45 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i can tell that this is a more personal piece. what ever it is you're going through my prayers go out to you.[/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on May 23, 2005 21:28:33 GMT -6
you're poetry is kinda creepy to me because all your poetry i can relate to, but the happenings are at the same time as the things i relate ur work to.... ur really are a great writer though
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Post by Xanthic Flower on May 24, 2005 16:37:09 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]Your poetry is very strong.[/glow]
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 9, 2005 6:31:38 GMT -6
I loved it...it is very strong....I can tell the way you felt but just reading that poem.
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BlueMoon
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Post by BlueMoon on Jun 9, 2005 17:10:49 GMT -6
Something must have happened to stir those emotions in that poem. Nice job on this poem.
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Post by Only Me on Jun 14, 2005 0:30:30 GMT -6
Its amazing how several word together can make a good piece without any sentences. The reader can pick up on whats going on without actually havign been there... great job!
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